There’s Amnesia In Her Kiss – Writing The Tom Waits Way

There's Amnesia In Her Kiss

Avoiding common collocations and tired cliches is the art of good writing

Tom Waits has a way with words, and even though he writes songs, he should inspire writers and authors. His words are memorable for one very simple reason.

Tom Waits never uses a common collocation, and instead, surprises and sometimes shocks with his choice of word combinations.

There are too many memorable lines by Waits, so I won’t list them here. Enough to say that if he were writing about a Ferrari, it would never be red. It would be rusted metallic purple or lime green.

In his line about a kiss, in Black Market Baby, many writers may have collocated honey, sugar or some other kind of sweetness, but amnesia is a complete surprise, and because of this, very memorable. It is also highly descriptive and makes one think about the deeper meaning behind these few words.

My favourite author, Douglas Adam, also used irregular and unpredictable collocations, such as, “the ships hung in the sky in much the same way that bricks don’t.”

Without going into a long list of memorable quotes, these two are enough to make the point that writers often reach for the common, all too often used and unsurprising collocations, which worse, can be tired cliches.

The art of great writing is to give a reader a little blow to predictability

If I stay with space ships and kisses, perhaps examples of unpredictability might work like this.

The ship was so fast rapid swift  fleet that it passed overtook hurtled ahead of itself five six times on its way to Mars Uranus.

A simplistic example, but apart from the choice of verbs, the number six is rarely used, along with four and eleven, and Uranus sounds like a much more mysterious destination.

As she waited lingered ripened for his kiss, her lips trembled quivered shimmered and shivered with anticipation anxiety unease.

Ok, so not the two best lines I have ever written, but the process is clear by these two examples.

Especially during the first editing stage of a novel, look for word combinations that are far too predictable and then search for better, and more descriptive, or even surprising, vocabulary.

If you need inspiration while editing, you could do worse that listen to some songs by Tom Waits.

Derek Haines

Derek Haines is an Australian author, living in Switzerland.

One thought on “There’s Amnesia In Her Kiss – Writing The Tom Waits Way

  • Yes agreed. Very interesting. And I think I unwittingly followed this train of thought when writing my book #SpeedBumpHimalayas.
    “I’d hidden rhat minor piece of information somewhere behind my brain muzzle, but now it flew out like a chicken being chased by a slavering Panther.”


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